The approach to the bar is everythingThe above lines set up the next lines nicely. Donald S., Age 13unless I have counted my steps hit my markers feel up to it I refuse . to follow through I am committed to beginnings or to nothingYes, if you don’t commit to beginnings, you’ll get nothing. Drew D. Age 13And doing everything well! Ben T., Age 13“Planting” is very easy to see, yet is not a clichéd use. Matt R. Age 13planting the pole at runway's end jolts me out of sprinting I take off kicking in and up my whole weight trying the frailty of fiberglassHe doesn't use punctuation in order to show one flowing movement. Donald S., Age 13never forcing myself trusting it is right to be taken to the end of tension poised for the powerful thrust to fly me beyond expectationAbove is alliteration of "p" sound. Eric V., Age 13The final stanza is very descriptive! Matt R., Age 13near the peak I roll my thighs inward arch my back clearing as much of the bar as I canwell envisioned. Drew D., Age 13(knowing the best jump can be canceled by a careless elbow) and open my hands.
Submitted on July 9th, 2008