Making a Fist

For the first time, on the road north of Tampico,
I felt the life sliding out of me,
a drum in the desert, harder and harder to hear.

I like see this road, Tampico, and hearing its name. Patty Schlutt, age 15
Here Naomi's writing excellently illustrates how life fades like a sound we move further from, Andrew De Haan, age 22

I was seven, I lay in the car
watching palm trees swirl a sickening pattern past the glass.
My stomach was a melon split wide inside my skin.

Superb metaphor! Unexpected. Also I like the assonance of "split wide inside." Patty Schlutt, age 15
An interesting way to describe a stomach ache; it conveys the pain realistically. Rachel McGuinness, age 17
I love the image of the "swirl[ing] trees." Hannah Fleming, age 14.

 
"How do you know if you are going to die?"

The two lines of dialogue add an element to this poem that takes it to the next level. Rachel McGuinness, age 17.

I begged my mother.
We had been traveling for days.
With strange confidence she answered,
"When you can no longer make a fist."

To think of like ending when one can no longer make a fisht is amusing. A sometimes involuntary motion that not many think about as the motion that sustains life. making a fist conveys power, a person's limited power over death perhaps, or the power that comes with life. Rachel McGuinness, age 17
I like hearing the mother speak; we hear a little bit of who she is. Patty Schlutt, age 15

 
Years later I smile to think of that journey,
the borders we must cross separately,
stamped with our unanswerable woes.
I who did not die, who am still living,

Lying behind questions...that's the way it is, isn't it. Amy Fleming, age 17

still lying in the backseat behind all my questions,
clenching and opening one small hand.

It is interesting to think of going through life behind one's questions, never quite catching up to them and discovering their answers. Kara Madden, age 22
Through the 3rd Eye was supported in its inception by the Grand Rapids Humanities Council and is currently made possible by continued volunteer effort and private support. Copyright 2013.